kljip2010 发表于 2023-2-1 09:53   全显示 1楼
好文！构思不错，前期描述的房屋装修导致父母、儿子三人同床令人看了遐想连篇。但母亲似乎多一些心理描述才好，从母子亲情到乱伦的转变。文中的母亲显然是一位身材火辣，魅力十足，美丽而又内心细腻之人，可以有很多视觉和心理上的描写，增加读者内心对文中母亲的一种期待。其实好文并不一定全篇都是肉戏，铺垫的好，最后的肉戏才会越加精彩！


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